I friends!!! This is my first post... Now it's a our national celebration... I took a shower after gym...
My name is Cristian Díaz, from Santiago Chile, a great place for live!!! When I decided to study, the Universidad de Chile, Electrical Engineer was my choice... I like the electromagnetic phenomena, when the nature show us its power!!!... A good friend say me: Cristian, Do you like help us in a investigation on a bioengineer lab?... I agree inmediatelly... for four years I learned about the life, the childs and their brain... engineers and medicians creating a system for help the medicians labour for sleep disorders diagnostics over eigth hours of polysomnographics records... Well, this epoch was fantastic, and now too... My job is a IT Engineer for Optimisa SA... This company is unique, we try to create a innovatives system for banks, universities and goverments... At 2007, the Kenya Goverment go to Chile to see the exerience of Servicio de Impuestos Internos and its web tax payment system... At 2009, I went to Nairobi Kenya to install a Monitoring System... And Now, I'm traying to think in english...
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Cristian :
Your English is so creative but you must be careful with your grammar.You have some minor mistakes. Here goes the analysis of your text.
First,your title should be "Wake me up".Then you forgot the "h" of "Hi".Also "A friend told me...do you want to help us with...".Now in the same line there's a tense mistake ,"I agreed" is the correct form.Another mistake "For four years I learned about life,children and their brains.Important the noun "medicians" doesn´t exist.,use "Researchers ,Physicians or Doctors" instead.Also the number is "eight" not "eigth". Another mistake to be corrected 2...try to create an innovative...".Finally "The Kenian Government came to Chile to supervise the experience".(Also "I am trying to think...")
Your teacher.
Thank you sir... I corrected the first post
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HI friends!!!
This is my first post... Now it's a our national celebration... I took a shower after gym...
My name is Cristian Díaz, from Santiago Chile, a great place for live!!!
When I decided to study, the Universidad de Chile, Electrical Engineer was my choice...
I like the electromagnetic phenomena, when the nature show us its power!!!...
A good friend say me: Cristian, Do you like help us in a investigation on a bioengineer lab?...
I agreed inmediatelly... for four years I learned about the life, the childs and their brain...
engineers and physicians creating a system for sleep disorders diagnostics over eight hours of polysomnographics records... Well, this epoch was fantastic, and now too...
My job is a IT Engineer for Optimisa SA... This company is unique, we try to create a innovatives system for banks, universities and goverments... At 2007, the Kenya Goverment went to Chile, they were trying to understand our experience over Servicio de Impuestos Internos and its web tax payment system... At 2009, I went to Nairobi Kenya to install a Monitoring System... And Now, I'm traying to improve my english ...
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